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Some poems

Postby the31337ofPurgatory » Fri Oct 05, 2007 9:04 pm

I decided to post some poems - YAY! Hope you all enjoy them.

Clockwise (10-4-07; revised from 5-28-07)
You said “I’ve never been on one,”
I said “Someday I’ll take you.”
Now here we are together,
Inhaling the Milky Way,
And watching the as silver mist
Lightly drifts out from our lips.
We cannot see the world below us.

Twelve O’ Clock is our only chance to be
Just you and me.

You said “Tonight was so much fun,”
I said “I thought so too.”
And here we are together,
Convincing the night to stay,
And stopping clocks to grant our wish
Though the sun will soon resist.
We cannot see the world ahead of us.

Twelve O’ Clock is our only chance to be
Just you and me.

I Like to Pretend it's Infinite (1-25-07)
Last week I let out a breath I'd been holding
and watched him travel skyward,
in the foreground of evergreens,
painted shades of gray. And there he met a snowflake...

"Won't this whisper stay," said she,
"to dance in the winter wind with me?"
and he replied: "I must kindly decline,
For I have not the time
This existence of mine shall not last long,
I'm just a sigh, I'm not a song."
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Postby Carebarebaby » Sat Oct 06, 2007 12:30 am

*swoon* Will you marry me? :)

Those were beautiful! I love how you added dialogue, it just made it stronger!
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Postby zemarl » Sat Oct 06, 2007 12:34 am

mmm, i like your style ^^
i wear purple for my daddy
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Postby Aletheia Dolorosa » Sat Oct 06, 2007 12:48 am

I like the second one the best, it has a nice rhythm as well as a beautiful sentiment. 'I'm just a sigh, I'm not a song' - that's beautiful!
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Postby the31337ofPurgatory » Sun Oct 07, 2007 3:32 am

Carebarebaby - maybe.

Thank you all for the kind compliments. :D

(hopefully I'll write some more soon.)
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Postby Carebarebaby » Sun Oct 07, 2007 3:50 am

HAHAHAHAHAHAHA! That was the closest anyone has ever come to saying yes(and I've asked a surprising amount of people and animals)! Normally I just get a nervous laugh and then they walk away and never talk to me again...maybe I should stop doing that :? Anyways, thank you for considering, Joe!

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