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The Svalbardian Way (Please read and review)

Postby Alex-Giovanni » Fri Jan 18, 2008 12:56 am

This is the first ime I've posted a fan fic on this forum, so I hope you like it.
Its called the Svalbardian Way and is set when Will and Lyra are in their early twenties.
This is the link to the story on the fan fiction website: The Svalbardian Way
There is also a link in my signature leading to the same page.
There are only three chapters so far but hopefully soon there will be four.

Chapters
1. In and Out
2. Some Dreams Last Forever
3. The Subtle Trick
4. The Journey North (In Progress)
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Re: The Svalbardian Way (Please read and review)

Postby shady » Fri Mar 20, 2009 10:01 pm

I dont really like fanfics,but this one is good(Not great,coz PP didnt write it) :o
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Re: The Svalbardian Way (Please read and review)

Postby Philharmonic » Sat Mar 21, 2009 12:25 pm

good, if notr a little inaccurate and confusing. three things i noticed;

1. it was written that pan had settled as a pine marten - similar to a stoat or ermine - but in this he's a wildcat.

2. to close windows, will pinched the edges together - the knife was only good for opening.

3. the ice palace was torn down after iorek beat iofur raknison down - bears lived out on the ice after that as solitary creatures.

but i mean, to quote jeremy clarkson, 'that's like noticing the crocodile that's about to eat you is a bit cross-eyed'. good fanfic.
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