much better than the original version! Lyra is much more detailed, if a bit out of proportion, and Pan more realistic. The perspective is more dynamic, though the beds are still flat. Try showing a little of the tops of the beds at an angle. The soft pastel colouring, though pretty, kinda takes away from the danger of the situation. Howeva, i can tell ya put a lot of effort into this drawing.

I have to admit I did this when there was a snow storm and the power was out and I was doing it with just the daylight coming threw the window. I mean like it wasn't that bad but I still think I could do better.

OK You know what I'm going to admit that I compleatly suck at drawing this kind of stuff............ :(

ha i liked how you've labelled the aleithiometer. pan is really good :]